Reworked Film noir Script and screenplay

Film Noir screen play – Loves sinister gifts

EXT. Establishing shot empty Fields

Wide pan shot showing the field: A prone body of a girl is revealed.

Greyson (V.O) In all the years I’ve done this job it never gets easier, if anything it gets harder. The world is said to be always changing but I never see that, all I see is the pain and the darkness. People they never change, not really

Camera shot changes- Close up of body revealing the girls hand it appears s though she is holding a piece of paper. The camera moves to show two detectives approaching the body.

Detective Greyson (re: Detective Carter) this is the second body this week, Do you think it’s the same killer?

Detective carter hopefully, I would hate to think that we have more than one psychopath running around…

Detective Greyson [Interrupting] even if it’s not the same killer there will always be more psychopaths running round.

Camera changes to a slow mid-shot as Greyson bends to look at the victims hand. He retrieves the paper and looks at it

Camera angle changes to a over the shoulder shot looking at the paper

Greyson look at this the murderer left us something. [Reading the paper] ‘Do you like the presents I’ve left you my love?’ well that answers it it’s the same killer, who do you think this is addressed to?

Camera angle changes to a mid-shot as Greyson stands to show Carter the paper.

Over the should showing carter

Carter I’m not sure, the victim or perhaps us?

[Cut off by Greyson as he loudly Hhmmm’s]

Over the should showing Greyson

Greyson Hhmmmm, No. Who found the victim’s body?

Over the shoulder shot of Carter as she points towards a woman standing off to the corner

Carter That would be one miss Josie Lovell, she was friends with the victim. She found her whilst walking home.

Tilt shot off Josie Lovell starting at her feet and going up.
Close up of her face

Greyson O.V  I should have known then that no woman who looked that lovely would be innocent, but like a fool I was blind to the truth. Taken in by her, like a spider to a fly.